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harkedai
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Posted on 01-04-07 6:25
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Disclaimer: All the names used are fictitious, nothing personal to anyone living or dead.... ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------- ‘Life is full of surprises, no one knows what happens next…’ *It’s a unsolved mystery, it unfolds in tiny pieces and the people who are able to understand those pieces are the ones who are successful in their life….* Abhinash tries to solve his puzzled life… Lately, Red Level has been his best friend…friend of sorrow and joy…the only friend he can trust on…who is always supportive and helpful…who is always there for Abhinash, the only one who listens to him…cries with Abhinash…laughs with Abhinash…. *What don’t I have? Good luxurious life in America, a dream come true career in IBM, opportunities to go abroad and enhance my expertise and experience, a good wife…* Good wife…Every time Abhinash thinks about his life, he gets stuck in his wife… ‘Tyo bachha haru laai sutaaa na oie, kati chyau chyau gareko, dikkai laagney gari…’ he shouted at his wife… Nirjala was an educated girl from a respected family. She did her masters before coming to US with Abhinash. A decent girl, loyal to her husband…dedicated her life as a housewife to her husband and 6 children. She never in her life…not even for a moment thought about another guy…never spoke a single word against her husband. She was a perfect wife, every guy wanted. *Bichari Nirjala, what did she do wrong to me???...* Abhinash asked himself Trying hard to find one flaw in Nirjala, Abhinash empties the glass of scotch. Abhinash, as every other individual, came to US with a dream…a dream to be successful…a dream to become something in his life… *What would be Anjali doing right now…???* Anjali…the girl Abhinash always loved and still does, the love of his life, the girl he always wanted…he tries his best to find her in Nirjala, yet another unsuccessfull attempt…. He fills his glass again… ‘Baba, ghar bata phone aako thiyo bihana, hajur hidey pachi, mom ley gariseko…’ Nirjala passes the message. Abhinash looks at Nirjala’s face, and tries to avoid her eyes. Since the day he married Nirjala, he tries to avoid her eyes full of questions…he has no answer to her questions. *Babu, sarai ramri kt chey, ramro ghar parivaar ko, byawahaarik chey kt…hamro ichha chai, tailey tehi kt laai biha gar bhanney ho…* His mom’s words are still in his mind. How can they ever get out of his mind??? He at first rejected this marriage proposal, and forwarded his relationship with Anjali, but….. His family rejected it, COMPLETELY
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aagolagyo
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Posted on 01-10-07 9:46
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harkey buda nice one!! i was missin in da story tai pani..thats aite..:P good one peace sagar
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Cerine
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Posted on 01-10-07 9:56
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aagolagyo re :-S where? when? how? why? did i miss anything?
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Juggy
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Posted on 01-10-07 10:27
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Hmmm... Nice Nice..;) Good one broda!!..:)
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realis
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Posted on 01-10-07 10:48
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Nice story! Starting is suberb..Good way of writing .It's like reading a novel but short one.Ending is also not too bad. It is like natural. Accident happens when someone stressed and drunk drives but why did harke dai ended the story too fast.There should have been suspense like " Abinash missing after that day and Nirjala's real life struggle in America for her and her kids survival......"
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sweetest_sIN
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Posted on 01-10-07 12:21
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Ahhh i hate this story... and ABHINASH is a LOOSER....how dare he leave Nirjala like that. just coz his parents forced him doesnt mean he has to marry her...and ruin her entire life and now after 6 kids he dies??? no way....thats not fair at all he just doesnt get off his marriage that easily. wat is she suppose to do with 6 kids..all alone in a place she barely knows anyone??
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npl2us
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Posted on 01-10-07 3:43
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is it the end of story for real? i did not get it. someone explain please!
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harkedai
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Posted on 01-10-07 11:45
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ritthe jasus....you beeen good wid jasusi these days :P huh...i don't really sleep too much... alien bro...thanx for reading.... Power_gal...i'll try to extend a lil bit from next time :)... Cerineeeeeeeeeeeee...........i guess there's not huh :P howdie do ignorer ? Ankita....i guess that's for the readers to decide...and also for everyone to when they gettin married ni... hoina ra ??? Pretty woman....do u watch too much of hindi movies... ??? huh huh ??? :p j/k...hey thanx again for that comment....too mature :)....how u been ?? hi nanu...i guess we think similar... hehe...don't say we don't now.... aagolagyo sarkar....jadau takraaye....aba arko patak haru laai villian ko role pakka :) heroine ko rape garney chai hajur laai nai....aru matokni laai ta chuna pani dinna :P aru haru herdai baschan...bhutrai sitti :D juggy sir...hajur laai maan paryo...ma danga :) realis....thank you soooo much for reading and comment Sweetest_sin..........awwwwwwwwwwwww my honey.....how u been doing ??? I knoa hai...ABHINASH is a looser...how bout you and me find a perfect guy for her :) we could be working together :D np2ls....number and words...you sound like a password...well bro...best thing...scroll back and read again :P j/k :D i can try to bro....dunno how helpful it could be. Thanx to all the silent readers....well life is full of surprises...bottomline....do what you want to do....rest all is peace laterzzz... harkeDai
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aagolagyo
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Posted on 01-11-07 9:45
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dhuttt harkey buda..jpt do i look like rapist kind..:P bekuff...hero bhanya hero..:P bujdaina cerineeeeeee aagolagyo dillai ma...damkal bolaideu..:P peace sagar
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Cerine
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Posted on 01-11-07 10:51
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Peaceeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!! I am not an ignorer :@ :@ and i already did... otherwise i don't think u'd be singing rite now :-P
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Birkhe_Maila
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Posted on 01-11-07 10:56
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हर्केले नि मजाले कथा लेखेछ गाँठे! अब ६-६ जना छोराछोरि भै सक्दा नि स्वास्नि कस्तो मन नपरेको होला अभिनाशलाई!
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sweetest_sIN
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Posted on 01-11-07 11:21
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Harkey buda.. geezzz i still hate the story and the writer for writing such story... ufff and as for my dear Nirjala...i will find her a perfect guy :P dijju - "Please write a happy ending story next time...u are the writer u can make anything happen."
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Pretty
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Posted on 01-11-07 11:41
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harkeDai I am fine, how are you doing? yeah I do watch hindi movies :) but the ending I wanted is not taken from any movies ke, I am not copy cat. :P
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Posted on 01-11-07 12:23
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.................... Nirjala gets a call from the credit companies starting the following months. She is stunned when she finds out about the life insurances Abi had with all the credit cards! $200000 to $500000 in every card! Within a month, Nirjala has a bank account stacked up with 2.3 million and all credit cards debts paid off! Nirjala thinks and thinks and thinks........... Did Abi do this on purpose? She recalls the financial constraints they were having over the last 9 months when it was becoming hard for them to meet the home mortgage of $4500 every month plus the toyota camry 07, nissan pathfinder, audi and linclon navigator's payments! He had recently bought a huge property for his parents in Nepal and one for himself too. Moreover, with 4 out of his 6 credit cards maxed out, Abi was more than always worried about how he would be justifying the ends! Every now and then Nirjala would ask for his permission to work, and as always Abi would reject the notion. ........................................................
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Cerine
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Posted on 01-11-07 2:20
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harkedai
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Posted on 01-11-07 3:16
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sweetest_sin, my honey :D....ufff...you still hate it rey :O OMG... Dijju: i'll keep that in mind from next time aagolaagyo: hehehe :D i know its not ur kind :D Cerineeeeeeeeeee............. :) Santoshgiri...thanx for adding a better ending :)... Preety woman :D....no comment Birkhe_mula :P hehehe j/k....k garnu bro testai ho... rey kya ;-) I appriciate you all reading again.... Din really know it would touch so many hearts :( harkeDai...:-)
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Posted on 01-11-07 3:32
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हर्के ब्रो ले पनि कथा लेख्नन सुरु । ।लौन नि के देख्नु पर्यो । ।धेरै राम्रो छ कथा keep it up spyboy
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Ankita
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Posted on 01-12-07 1:02
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Herkedai!...duh? dai??...ehehe...kasto nick ho?? dai bhannu nai parne...lol. Agreed to ur previous comment. ani ani Arko katha pani lekhne ki dai?:P...ehehe...i mean harkedai :)
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harkedai
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Posted on 01-12-07 11:14
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harkeDai...hmmmm...dai nai ta bhannu pardaina ni...if you look around carefully wat ppl have written...you are not bound...its your choice spydude...howdie do...hero haru purai gayaab ankita...i hope arko pani padhna paaincha...chittai nai :P (i hope so) :D harkeDai
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Posted on 01-12-07 11:38
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Nice characterization!. Well done harkeDai and welcome back! If I look from every angle, I see Nirjala as the most victimized character. Character such as Abhinash, who had been succumed by dilemma of going for his parents decision or against his choice, is not uncommon till today. But then it was the choice made by himself and who was made the scapegoat? harkeDai - Tell your imaginary Abhinash not to look back as there is not point of looking back when it especially spoils the present situation. I reckon we need to learn walk with the time. Nice work again! :-)
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spyboy
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Posted on 01-13-07 12:46
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flip flop nakkali dijju..bich ma pwakka bolna laj lagdaina.. harke bro..kaha gayab hunu..ali ali busy ho kya..aba feri skool suru..k garne..ajkal mula le call pani gardaina..kya saro busy jasto mula
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